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You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from one of your teachers. Write a letter to your teacher. In your letter: Give details of the job & position you are applying for Explain why the reference is important Suggest what information your teacher could put in the reference

Dear Sir, I hope you are doing great. I am writing
this
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letter
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 in
regards
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 to my
job
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 application. As you know, I recently completed my studies and now I am looking for
a suitable work
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suitable work
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 for me. I have
one
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 position in my mind,
however
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, I need your assistance in getting that
job
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. Basically, I am looking for a
job
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of
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as
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CAD
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a CAD
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 Designer at New Flyer. As a CAD designer, I just have to design models using different
softwares
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software
 which I have already learnt during my program. I think I will be
top
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a top
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 applicant for that place.
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,
one
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 thing that disturbs me is that
person
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a person
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 must have at least
one
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 year of experience which I don't have. I am extremely worried about the fact that I will not be selected only because of
lack
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my lack
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 of experience regardless of how skilled I am at using those
softwares
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software
.
Therefore
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, I require a reference
letter
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 from your side to strengthen my application.
Moreover
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, you were
one
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 of the past employees of New Flyer which will be a bonus point for me. I would like you to highlight my skills in the
letter
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 as well efficiency
to perform
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in performing
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 tasks accurately. Your little effort will make my way towards success more easier. I would be really grateful if you could spare some time for me and write a reference
letter
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 for my
job
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 application. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon Yours Faithfully, Dilpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each with one main idea. This will help the reader follow your points better.
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Make sure to use a more polite and formal tone in your letter to match the situation better.
coherence and cohesion
Include a short introduction stating the purpose of the letter right at the beginning to make it clear.
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You clearly stated the job position you are applying for, which is important information.
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Your letter has a friendly tone which is nice for a teacher-student relationship.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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