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4 June 2025, The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.

4 June 2025, The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.
The table depicts the total
number
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 of silk
factories
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 in England from 1851 to 1901
as well as
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 the
number
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 of total employees, categorized by gender.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of employees showed a downward tendency,
while
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 that of
factories
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 followed a fluctuation.
On the other hand
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, there was a higher population
in
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of
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 female workers than males throughout the period. In 1851,
although
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 the total
workers
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 was the largest at 130.750 individuals, it had the lowest
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factories
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number of factories
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 compared to the following years, with 272 places.
However
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, in 1861, the quantities of silk
factories
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 significantly increased to 761,
whereas
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 their workers decreased by around 20.000 people.
By comparison
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, the
number
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 of silk companies fell marginally to 693 in 1871 before rising again in 1881 at 702 locations and continued to drop over the
last
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 period,
accounted
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 for 623 in 1901. There was a
decrease
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decreasing
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 trend in employee population, dropping from 91.412 in 1871 to 38.942 in 1901. Interestingly, the population of women working in
this
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 sector was always higher than that of the opposite sex for
half-century
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half a century
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, factories with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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