The first pies chart illustate the percentage of both Australia and New zealand in consuming through oversea and local websites. While another table depict the reason for just online shopping in the year 2012.

The first pies chart illustate the percentage of both Australia and New zealand in consuming through oversea and local websites. While another table depict the reason for just online shopping in the year 2012.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The first pies chart illustate the percentage of both Australia and New zealand in consuming through oversea and local websites. While another table depict the reason for just online shopping in the year 2012.
The first pies chart
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illustrates
illustrate
the percentage of
both
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Australia
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Australian
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and New
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zealand
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in
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consuming through
oversea
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overseas
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and local websites.
While
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another table
depict
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the
reason
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for just online shopping in the year 2012.
Overall
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,
while
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in
Autralia
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Australia
, most
of
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apply
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people choose
oversea
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overseas websites
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website
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, there is
a
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opposite trend in New
Zealand
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.
Additionally
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, in
both
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countries, the
reason
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of
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for
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lower prices than
in store
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in-store
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for shopping online
is
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made up the majority. Regarding to
pies
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pie
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chart where people using
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both
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the both
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oversea
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overseas
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and local
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website
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websites
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in 2
countires
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countries
were just a minor
percent
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, 10% for
Australia
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and 7% for
another
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others
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.
However
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,
while
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the
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most
proprtion
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proportion
of
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the customer
a customer
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customer
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customers
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from
Australia
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prefer using
Overseas
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an Overseas
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website
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, making it up
at
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apply
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65%, there was just exactly 50% in New
Zealand
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. The same trend can be seen in
the
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apply
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local
website
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shopping, the customer
form
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from
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New
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zealand
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was
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accounted for 43% which was nearly double of its in
Australia
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. Taking a look
to
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at
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the remaining stable where the reasons for lower prices than
in store
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in-store
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stood out among others at around 52% in
both
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countires
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countries
.
Like wise
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the
reason
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of
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for
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conveniece
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convenience
were
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was
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also
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have
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apply
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a small disparity between
both
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countries, with roughly 30% and
newzealand
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Newzealand
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was higher. In
term
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terms
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of
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range of productive reasons,
while
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there was accounted for a small proportion
but
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it
still
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was still
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7 times more than the other
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reason
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reasons
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which
just
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was just
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2% in
both
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countries.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words both, australia, zealand, reason, website with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depict" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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