Some people believe charity organisations should only offer help to people of their own countries. Others against it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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and give my opinion on
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charity
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their country ,
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giving them food or providing them with
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they are helping
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community they live in by doing
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secondly
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the
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focuses
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of their country more and knowing what they need on daily basis as its
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different
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other
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beleive
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believe
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their countries
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help on
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international
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thing but only if they already took care of their
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their own
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couldnt
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couldn't
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of their
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country
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finish
their problem first and help the
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homeless
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discussing
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what
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to me ,
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strongly
beleive
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believe
that
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charity
orgnazison
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organisations
should only provide help of their own unless they already do that they could help
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outside
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people
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task achievement
Make sure to use correct spelling. For example, 'charity organizations' instead of 'charity orgnazions.' This will help people understand your ideas better.
coherence
Use clear paragraphs for each main idea. Start a new paragraph when you introduce a different point. This helps to organize your thoughts in a logical way.
task achievement
Provide more examples to support your points. For instance, you can explain how helping homeless people in their own country can bring positive change.
task achievement
You showed a good understanding of both views regarding charity organizations.
coherence
Your opinion is stated clearly at the end, which helps the reader know your perspective.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Charitable organization
  • Local issues
  • National solidarity
  • Efficient use of resources
  • Global responsibility
  • Humanitarian assistance
  • International cooperation
  • Poverty
  • Natural disasters
  • Health crises
  • Domestic charity
  • International aid
  • Philanthropy
  • Altruism
  • Social welfare
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