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Band 4

Some people believe charity organisations should only offer help to people of their own countries. Others against it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

there is no
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denying
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originations
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 become a huge part of helping
people
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 there is no
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denying
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orgnazions
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originations
has
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have
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doing
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done
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 a huge part of helping
people
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to
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in
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their
thire
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their
 countries ,
while
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otherr
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other
others
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believe
belive
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live
 they should help
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outside
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out side
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outside
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 of their
regoin
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region
religion
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i
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 will discuss both
view
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views
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 and give my opinion on
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the one
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chartiy
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charity
 organisations
has
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have
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doing
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done
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alot
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a lot
 to help
pepole
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people
of
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in
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 their country ,
for instance
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 giving them food or providing them with
home
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a home
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 and
do
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doing
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thems
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apply
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some
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groceries
,
in other
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words
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 they are helping
their
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the
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 community they live in by doing
alot
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a lot
 and these are some examples of doing that and
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secondly
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secondly,
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 the
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focuses
focus
 more on the
people
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 of their country more and knowing what they need on daily basis as its
diffrenet
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different
 from culture to
onther
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other
another
. on the
second
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other
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people
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beleive
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believe
 that they do more outside of
thire countrys
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their countries
 and
providing
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provide
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 help on
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an interniaional
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interniaional
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international
 basis , i
posonally
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personally
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it is
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good
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a good
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 thing but only if they already took care of their
homless
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homeless
homes
of
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in
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countrys
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country
countries
,
for
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instance
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the
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they
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couldnt
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couldn't
 help
out side
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outside
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 of their
countrys
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country
country's
 unless they
finsih
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finish
 their problem first and help the
homlees
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homeless
 by getting them food or job and if they could do
this
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 the
homless
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homeless
 could be even part of
community
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the community
a community
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 and do
alot
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a lot
 of things if they invest in it . in conclusion , after
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discussing
 both
view
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views
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 and
shows
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apply
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what
occur
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has occurred
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 to me ,
i
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I
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 strongly
beleive
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believe
 that
charaity
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charity
orgnazison
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organisations
 should only provide help of their own unless they already do that they could help
out side
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outside
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people
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task achievement
Make sure to use correct spelling. For example, 'charity organizations' instead of 'charity orgnazions.' This will help people understand your ideas better.
coherence
Use clear paragraphs for each main idea. Start a new paragraph when you introduce a different point. This helps to organize your thoughts in a logical way.
task achievement
Provide more examples to support your points. For instance, you can explain how helping homeless people in their own country can bring positive change.
task achievement
You showed a good understanding of both views regarding charity organizations.
coherence
Your opinion is stated clearly at the end, which helps the reader know your perspective.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Charitable organization
  • Local issues
  • National solidarity
  • Efficient use of resources
  • Global responsibility
  • Humanitarian assistance
  • International cooperation
  • Poverty
  • Natural disasters
  • Health crises
  • Domestic charity
  • International aid
  • Philanthropy
  • Altruism
  • Social welfare
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