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arge companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

In recent years, the crucial impact of the gap between top
executives
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 and regular
employees
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 has become a subject of debate.
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While it
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 is understandable that CEOs and
executives
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 deserve to receive higher salaries
due to
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 their responsibilities, abilities and the significant thing which is the pressure they face. I believe that the earnings of other
employees
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 should not be overlooked, especially in large corporations where success depends on the contributions of the entire workforce.
On the other hand
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, CEOs and
executives
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 are responsible for making strategic decisions that essentially can impact the future of a company. Offering them high salaries can serve
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 motivation and reward for their leadership,expertise and experience.
Nonetheless
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, I strongly presume that the contribution of regular
employees
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 is equally important and should be fairly recognized. In conclusion,
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 higher salaries for CEOs and
executives
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 can be justified to some extent, I believe that balanced compensation for all
employees
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 is essential. Companies should reward talent and hard work at all levels to promote long-term employee satisfaction.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
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coherence and cohesion
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You presented a clear opinion about the salary issue.
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You included a conclusion that summarizes your view effectively.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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