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The table below shows the results of a survey of the average number of cars travelling through three suburban roads during working hours in a 10-year pollution monitoring programme. Traffic calming was introduced in Harper Lane at the beginning of 1999

The table below shows the results of a survey of the average number of cars travelling through three suburban roads during working hours in a 10-year pollution monitoring programme. Traffic calming was introduced in Harper Lane at the beginning of 1999
The table depicts information about the results of a survey of the mean
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 of automobiles commuting via three different suburbans during working shifts in a 10-year pollution monitoring programme. Traffic calming began in
Harper
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Lane
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 at the beginning of the year 1999.
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, Long
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lane
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 had the highest
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 of
cars
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 travelling
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 route. The
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 of automobiles moving through
Harper
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lane
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 fluctuated over the period of time. In 1993,
Harper
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lane
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 had the lowest
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 of vehicles travelling through the suburban road. Regarding Long
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lane
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, the
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 of
cars
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 rose dramatically from 400
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 in 1993 to 1400
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 in 2002,
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 the
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 of vehicles travelling via
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 increased gradually at the beginning of the period with values of 82, 100, 386, 542, 654, and 915 between 1993 and 1998.
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, there was a noticeable decline from 1999 to 2002 with values of 204, 173, 178, and 193.
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, Great York Way had 991
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 travelling via
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 route with 911
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 in 199.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, harper, lane, cars with synonyms.
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