The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts provide key information about the percentage of work between
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and
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in the UK
during
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1988 and 2012. The units are measured
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percentages
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in percentages
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
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are dominated in a
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type of
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in the two years.
In addition
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,
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a
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part
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time
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women
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the highest
percentages
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.
Whereas
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, the number of
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was less than 10 per cent.
According to
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what is shown, in 1988 the
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percentages
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of women
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full
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was 19%, and
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increased slightly to 26% in 2012.
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for man, they kept almost the same amount of employment in
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time
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with less
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then
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10
percent
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In terms of men that
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full
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time
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jobs, both of the years they were the highest
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with 53 percent in 1988 and 47% in 2012. On the other
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,
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pervade a
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time
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than
a
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apply
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full
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time
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in 1988, but the
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percentages
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dropped to 20% in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rate
  • economic landscape
  • information technology
  • service industry
  • manufacturing
  • agriculture
  • sector shift
  • healthcare sector
  • public administration
  • education sector
  • advancements in technology
  • traditional industries
  • modern sectors
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