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Some people believe that developments in the field of artificial intelligence will have a positive impact on our lives in the near future. Other, by contrast, are worried that we are not prepared for a world in which computers are more intelligent that humans. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

People seem to be either excited or worried about the future impact of artificial intelligence. Personally, I can understand the two opposing
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 of
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; I am thrilled about the excellent performance of
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, but at the
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 I am apprehensive about it becoming overused and
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 unnecessary issues regarding its development. On the one hand,
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 has been drastically adapting and improving its understanding of human
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 been widely used in professional areas, where humans’ attention to
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 very much needed. One example of an
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 adaptation is through Open
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 fascinating performances and well-written features have allowed students and adults to rely on it, making lives more productive than
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 had been in the past. Another example is that artificial intelligence has now
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 in medicine and science. In challenging
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 has replaced doctors, and results are beyond amazement. Its precision and scrupulousness guaranteed high-quality performance
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 its works.
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, artificial intelligence’s advancements are unmatched
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 humans, and immediate
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 experiencing a sharp rise.
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, students from around the globe
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 reported using
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 to complete their
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 doable on their own. In one similar case, a
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 student put charges against a professor for using
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 to create lectures, and
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 a refund, causing the professor to lose his occupation.
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, in scientific fields,
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 has caused numerous brilliant scientists to be replaced by non-living machines, resulting in unnecessary joblessness. In conclusion, artificial intelligence has its own advantages and disadvantages like any other creation done by
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outstanding people. It is valid to be concerned about
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 dominance, but appreciating its benefits and applying it in selected areas would, if not stop, slow the process of it becoming a threat to humanity.

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Make sure the introduction clearly states your opinion and includes both views.
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Ensure that paragraphs logically connect to each other and use linking words like 'firstly', 'on the other hand', and 'finally'.
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Provide clearer examples for your points to make them stronger. For example, explain how AI specifically helps in medicine.
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You demonstrate an understanding of both views on AI.
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Your examples are relevant and connected to the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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