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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.
The table provides data about the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who attended different types of secondary
schools
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 in the period between 2000 and 2009. In general, it is noticeable that the trend for
community
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schools
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 was upward,
whereas
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 that for other groups of
schools
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 was downward. As can be seen, in 2000 the figures for the number of
students
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 in
specialist
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schools
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 and
community
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schools
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 were similar, making up 12 %. What is more, the
percentage
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 of pupils in grammar
school
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 accounted for 24%, which was more than that in
community
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schools
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 and
specialist
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schools
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. As for voluntary-controlled
schools
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, their
percentage
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 of
students
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 belonged to the largest proportion of pupils, making up 52%.
However
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, that group of
schools
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 experienced a decline, with the figures comprising 38% in 2005. As regards the figures for pupils who attended
specialist
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schools
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 and grammar
schools
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, they both suffered a mere decrease, constituting 11% and 19% in 2005.
In contrast
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, there was a significant increase in the
percentage
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 of
students
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 who attended
community
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school
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, rising by 20%. In 2009, it
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 seen that the largest proportion of
students
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 was observed in
community
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school
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schools
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(58%).
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, the smallest proportion of
students
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 belonged to
specialist
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school
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(10%).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, students, schools, community, specialist, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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