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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart demonstrates the average amount of
hours
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 each
day
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 that
tourists
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 from different countries spend doing leisure activities on special occasions.
Overall
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, Chinese
tourists
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 prefer spending
time
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 reading books
while
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 visiting the beach is a favourite activity of
Brazilians
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.
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,
tourists
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 spent the lowest number of
hours
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 going to places. Look at the chart in more detail,
firstly
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, the Chinese spend most of their leisure
time
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 reading books, about 8
hours
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 each
day
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.
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, going to the beach and visiting locations was not preferred by the Chinese , only 3
hours
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 and one hour respectively.
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, American and Turkish
tourists
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 spent 3
hours
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 a
day
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 visiting places during
holiday
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the holiday
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,
while
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Brazilians
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 spent fewer than 1 hour on
this
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 activity. At the same
time
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, the average figure of
hours
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 that residents from Turkey and Brazil spent reading books is 4
hours
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.
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 but not least, American , Turkish and
Brazilians
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 spent their
time
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 coming to the beach from 4-6
hours
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 a
day
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 (Americans took the lowest position and
Brazilians
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 took the highest )

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, day, tourists, time, brazilians with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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