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Band 2.5

All nations on the planet have a responsibility to lessen the greenhouse gases that they emit. Although this can be very difficult for developing countries, they also need to make significant reductions. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is no denying the fact that people should pay attention to
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greenhouse emissions, despite that it could be hard for
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modern countries.
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 it is a commonly held belief that nations should take proactive steps in order to decrease
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emissions, there is
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 an argument
opposes
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that opposes
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 it. In my opinion, I consider that
gases
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 toxins have a significant impact
to
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on
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 our planet.
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 with, one of the main harmful
effect
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 of these toxins is
deforestration
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deforestation
.
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, the photosynthesis process for the trees will be
incompelete
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incomplete
.
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, they are considered
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air pollutants and will decrease the quality of the air.
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, the United
State
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States
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 of America
have
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 started to replace
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old fuel cars with
an electric cars
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electric cars
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. Another point to consider, factories in the developing
counntries
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countries
 could set an approach to be
enviroment
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environment
environmental
 friendly factories.
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,
produce
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 less carbon dioxide. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that everyone
have
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 the responsibility to save our planet, not only for
ourself
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ourselves
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 but
also
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 for our future.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. You mentioned it at the end, but it should be clear from the start.
coherence and cohesion
Use only clear and correct grammar. For example, change 'opposes it' to 'opposes this view'.
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Add more examples or details to support your points. This will help your ideas be more comprehensive.
task achievement
You touched on important points about air quality and environmental responsibility, which shows good awareness of the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • greenhouse gases
  • developing countries
  • sustainable development
  • carbon footprint
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • green technologies
  • financial aid
  • technology transfer
  • capacity-building programs
  • collective responsibility
  • vested interest
  • moral obligation
  • renewable energy sources
  • environmental sustainability
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