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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart displays information about
amount
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 of the
carbon
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 dioxide
emissions
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 per individual in various countries over a 40-year
period
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.
Overall
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,during the
period
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,the United Kingdom kept its highest
amount
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although
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 it had a slight decrease,
while
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 Sweden lost its second place so its
carbon
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 emission
amount
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 plummeted to
the
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a
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 low level.
On the other hand
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, average CO2 metrics in Italy and Portugal consistently increased compared to the past. With detailed analysis of a line chart,the number of
carbon
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 dioxide
emissions
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 per person levelled off from above 10 to approximately 8 in the United Kingdom.
Moreover
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, CO2 emission in Sweden steadily increased above 10 until 1977,
then
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 it dramatically decreased under 6 in 2007.
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,
mounting
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 of
emissions
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 per individual in Sweden and Portugal almost were similar to each other in 2007.
Additionally
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, in 1967,
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carbon
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the carbon
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 dioxide
amount
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 in Portugal
had
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was
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 below 2
in
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1967 but its number reached the top level in 2007 based on a given
period
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. During a 40-year
period
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, the number of CO2
emissions
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 per person in Italy fluctuated between about 4 and 8
,
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 and addressed second place among the 4 countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, carbon, emissions, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions
  • per capita
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • industrialization
  • environmental policy
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • climate change
  • mitigation efforts
  • emission levels
  • comparison
  • decade
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable development
  • regulatory measures
  • technological advancements
  • energy consumption
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