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Some people believe that students should be given homework every day, while others argue that daily homework is unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.?

Some individuals consider pupils ought to get
homework
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 on a daily basis, whilst others argue they shouldn’t.
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 understand that
children
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 might revise concepts or topics they have acquired during the day , I think there are more efficient ways to do that without overloading them. On the one hand,
students
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 can improve their discipline and
time
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 management from
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young age . If
children
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 are consistently doing their
homework
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 they can enhance their ability to complete things on
time
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 and to comprehend the value of
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 . When
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 was a child doing
homework
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 every day helped me to become more consistent because
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 had to overcome my laziness in order to complete the
tasks
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 .
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students
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 might become more disciplined and aware of
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 limits .
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, I think it can lead to
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an excessive
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 amount of pressure on
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 without having a worthwhile result. On the
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other
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 hand, some people assert that most of the
tasks
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students
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 are obliged to do are not effective . They argue that
homework
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 mainly consists of
tasks
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 that don’t require critical thinking or creativity ,which are more crucial to develop for
children
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 .
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, I can admit
this
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 view from my experience because as A child
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 experienced a similar situation . I had to complete a lot of
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 which weren’t intended to improve my logical reasoning or imagination.
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,the amount of work can lead to
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dismotivation
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demotivation
 of
students
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 to study because of tedious
tasks
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 that
students
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 must do.
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 I believe that
instead
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 of having
homework
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 every day, they can revise themes and concepts at school with their teacher .
To conclude
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 ,
although
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 there are some benefits of getting
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 on a daily basis
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 as discipline and
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 -management, disadvantages like dismotivation and ineffectivity of
tasks
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 outweigh them .

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Try to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
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Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and stick to that idea.
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coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You show awareness of both sides of the argument, which is good for discussion.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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