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The chart below show some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008.

The chart below show some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008.
The provided bar chart explores the
issues
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 which were most reported by citizens of United Kingdom
cities
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 during 2008.
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, all of the
cities
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 complained about health services the most with the exception of Glasgow and London where education and training
issues
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 stood out.
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,
while
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 air pollution was a top issue, it was the least complained about one from all locations. With regards to the four
cities
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 that had the most
complaints
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 concerning health services, 51–59% of
issues
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 were health-related, with Belfast reporting the highest figure. Meanwhile, in terms of reported
issues
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 about education or training,
complaints
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 ranged from 51-53% except in Newcastle where it was around 46%. Air pollution in these
cities
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,
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, represented a much smaller proportion of
complaints
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, all around or under 10%. Concerning the other three
cities
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, education and training reports made up roughly 53% in Glasgow
as well as
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 London,
whereas
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 Manchester only had 45% of their
complaints
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 directed at
this
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 problem. As for health services, all three of these municipalities reported similar figures, ranging from 49% to 52%.
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,
for
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air pollution,
it
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accounted for 9% to 15% of
issues
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, with Manchester making the most
complaints
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.

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