Some families think the best way to take care of their aging parents is to care for them at home. Others believe that it is better for their parents to live in a special home for the elderly. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that some families believe the best way of taking care of their older parents that they

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live with them in the same house,

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others

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opinion. In

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and give my opinion. On

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hand, the majority of elderly people have special needs like they have to eat certain

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of food or the need to administer medication

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a daily basis and

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could be done by their families as the best way.

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, the community believes that keeping our parents under our supervision is a part

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the family's responsibility.

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, younger children could learn moral lessons from their grandparents

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living with them.

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, some of the population are saying that the nurses and doctors in the special houses are well educated when dealing with ill older people.

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, some sons are living a busy lifestyle.

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, younger people are recently working more than one job or working and studying at the same time and they do not have

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enough time for their fathers and mothers. Another point to consider,

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someone is planning to get married and his partner is not preferring to live with his parents which will

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them to transfer the elderly to a special home. In conclusion, taking care of our elderly could face some significant

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but families should find the right balance.

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, there is no doubt that we love our family and we took

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support from them when we were younger.

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You presented both sides of the argument well, showing an understanding of different opinions.

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Some families think the best way to take care of their aging parents is to care for them at home. Others believe that it is better for their parents to live in a special home for the elderly. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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S. In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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