In the future all cars, uses and trucks will be dirverless. This only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. do you think the advatages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, technology has been growing rapidly. Many believe all cars and trucks
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be driverless in future.
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discuss
both the advantages and disadvantages of
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view before presenting my own Opinion.
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with, history has proven that every new
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has brought enormous benefits
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advanced feature of travelling without drivers will bring some positive
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benefits
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as, People can
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relax
, talk or spend time with family and friends,
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commuting. They can even
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themeselves
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themselves
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travelling.
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, travel with
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driverless
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vehicles may offer some limitations. It brings trust
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technology.
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can not travel peacefully, as any wrong movement of a car can cause serious Consequences. People feel
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when they drive a car
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their own.
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, there
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less chance of happening accidents because humans not only follow rules but
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use their judgments
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while
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driving. Personally, I believe that automatic running cars present several advantages like providing
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rest, relief,
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and entertainment
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travelling , but
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also
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offers
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disadvantages which may take
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life
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or lifetime injuries. In conclusion,
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driverless Vehicles make
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life
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Convenient , the advantages can not outweigh the disadvantages, as any minor mistake Can Cause drastic
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in any individual's entire
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Make sure your ideas are clear and fully developed. For example, explain more about how people can feel relaxed or safe when using driverless cars.
coherence cohesion
Link your ideas better. Use simple words like 'firstly', 'secondly', 'finally' to connect your points. For example, in the discussion of advantages, lead directly to the disadvantages with a linking word.
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Your introduction clearly sets up the essay's topic, showing your plan to discuss both sides.

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