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The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
chat
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chart
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 the number of adults participating in different sports
major
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majors
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 in one area, Around 1997 and 2017.
Firstly
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 you could see how
did
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apply
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men
get
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got
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 into
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sport
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sports
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 in the years 2017 , especially sports that
needs
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need
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 physical ability and stamina ,
However
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, You could clearly see how people in that area
has
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have
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 tennis as their
favorite
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favourite
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sport
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 and
its
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it's
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 the highest in both of the years 1997 and 2017
On the other hand
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, They're getting into new
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sport
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sports
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 not by moving people into
another sports
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another sport
other sports
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, But by attracting new people into new
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sport
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sports
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 like Basketball and Football and Rugby and you easily see why the new generation loves
that
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those
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 kinds of
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sport
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sports
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 because
its
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it
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 evolves around strength and how strong and tall you are especially for basketball. Altough , For some
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sport
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sports
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 like swimming and golf they didnt change in the aspect of
participant
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participants
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 in fact they almost
remaind
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remained
remains
remain
 the same unlike Cricket ,
They
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Which
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 lost
alot
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a lot
 of
participant
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participants
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 unfortunately in the year
of
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apply
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2017.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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