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Band 4.5

Some people claim that workers should wear uniforms. Others allege that people should be free on their choice. Discuss both opinions, and give your own opinion.

The issue of
workers
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workers'
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 clothes has sparked a significant debate between those
how
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who
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believe
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 that employees should have their own choices and others who advocate the importance of
reflect
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reflecting
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union
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a union
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 look, both views have their own merits and demerits and I will explain why I support the second
prespective
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perspective
 with related examples in the following essay. There are numerous reasons for my decision.
Firstly
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, wearing union uniforms can reflect the professional image
to
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 the buyers which may have
positive
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 impact on their sales rate. To illustrate, many
costumers
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customers
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 feel that these small details could push consumers toward
feeling
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a feeling
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 of satisfaction to cope with the shop.
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, It will enhance discipline in the
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. Economists embrace that any success needs for
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successful
goverence
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governance
. A good
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example
for
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this
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,
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 is what
occured
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occurred
occurs
 in many
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chines companies.
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Finally
, It is a good strategy for staff to save money.
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 means that they will not waste their budget on t-shirts.
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, there are varied cons that lead some folk to be conservative on the issue.
To begin
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 with, It may
be consider
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 as a type of
crack down
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crackdown
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 of freedom. To demonstrate, it will not be a choice for company members to decide what to wear.
furthermore
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, some
entrepreneur
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entrepreneurs
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 thought that
union
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the union
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 dress code may display depression
to
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in
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 some persons, particularly
for
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of
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 the dark
colors
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colours
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. on balance, I would argue
that is
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 vital to create
general
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 image for the brand with harmonious
colors
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.
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Although
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, It is very essential to achieve sustainable growth.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs have a clear and logical flow. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
task achievement
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Use more specific examples to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger.
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You showed awareness of both sides of the issue, which is great for discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction states your opinion clearly, which helps the reader understand your view.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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