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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read any entertainment books because they think it is were of time. Do you agree or disagree?

I believe that reading
books
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 is a
fun
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 thing but not
every one
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everyone
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like
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likes
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is
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it
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,
espacilly
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especially
the
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apply
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children as an adult I love reading
books
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eather
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either
rather
fun
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books
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 or drama.
However
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, from my point of
veiw
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view
 giving
you're
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your
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chailde
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child
children
 educational
books
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 all the time could make a bad impact on them, reading it's a good thing in general but foxing on one
taype
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type
 of
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books
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book
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 would be boring, if you want your
chaild
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child
 to read or
lrearn
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learn
 new
things
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 you should give them
sometime
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some time
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 to have
fun
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,
at the end
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 of
tha
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the
 day they are just kids and most likely they don't
faind
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find
 reading is a
fun
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 thing.
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 to
help
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helping
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you'r
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your
 kid
reading
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read
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books
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 by loving them and not forsing them, give them many
taypes
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types
 of
things
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 to read,so they learn new
things
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 let them read
fun
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 stuff or even drama you have to help them to
exploer
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explore
 what
there
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their
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bation
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book
 is.
For example
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 give them some
storys
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storeys
stories
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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, or even
magazen
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a magazen
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 they are reading and having
fun
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at
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 the
sametime
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same time
, and
this
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 is not a were of time they are learning new
things
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 about life and about
themselfes
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themselves
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.
eventulay
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eventually
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an
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apply
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entertainment
books
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 does not
acrros
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across
 with educational
books
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you'r
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your
 kid could do both to learn and explore more
things
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 about life and himself, and I believe you should support them.

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language
Improve your grammar and spelling; there are many mistakes. For example, it's 'every one likes it' instead of 'every one like is'.
coherence
Make sure your ideas are clearly connected. Use linking words like 'also', 'however', and 'for example' to improve flow.
task achievement
Give specific examples related to your main points to support your opinions more strongly.
content
You show a good understanding that balance is important in reading choices for children.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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