more people decided to have children in their later age in the past , why? do advantages of this outweigh the disadvantegs ?

there is no doubt that these days people delay having
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, the question is, do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ? in
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I'm going to discuss the disadvantages of
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. in terms of the
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side , having
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at late age could be hard to raise , the main reason given to support
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is we become less patient, to illustrate when we get older we do not have the energy to make more effort in anything
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and takes a lot of energy and time .
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a problem in the pregnancy and maybe the
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of the
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becomes harder ,
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were young when we get old
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perform at their best job and that could lead to becoming hard on the mother and causing problems to the
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,
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, the increase of giving
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with disable
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will increase ,
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, there were study from Cambridge university who did research on 100 people that married at advanced age 40% per cent of them giving
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who has a problem in his body . in conclusion , I believe that there are a lot of disadvantages to giving
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older age , because of the problems that
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mentioned and some of
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me at the moment .

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