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The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food, and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005

The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food, and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005
The given line chart indicates how much
value
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 of selected was
exports
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 from fuel,food and Manufactured goods. As can be clearly seen from the graph
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, the
value
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 of selected
exports
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 experienced different trends.
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 the figures for fuel went down significantly, the opposite trend was true in Manufactured goods. In
term
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 of the number of
value
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 of selected
exports
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 in fuel .There was a considerable decline in
value
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 selected between 2000 and 2005 from 45000
million
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 to 20000
million
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units
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 .Regarding these
figues
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figures
 for food ,during the period from 2000 to 2005,there was a levelling of at same
in
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value
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 of selected
exports
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 from 4000
million
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 to 4000
million
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units
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. Looking at the data for Manufactured goods ,from 2000 to 2005,the
number of
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value
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 of selected
exports
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 experienced a
fluctuate
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.The data rose rapidly by seventeen
thousands
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thousand
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million
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units
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 from 2000 to 2002.
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,there was a moderate plummet in
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value
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the value
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 of selected
exports
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 between 2002 and 2003 from about 25000
million
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 to over 20000
million
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units
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 before witnessing a steady plunge between 2003 and 2005 from around 20000
million
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 to over 25
million
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units
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, exports, million, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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