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Band 2.5

The staple shows how many people and millions use different form public transport and Melia between 2010 and 2014

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illustrate
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 the variation and the number of
passenger
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passengers
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several
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in several
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 types of public transport from 2010 to 2014.
Overall
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, it's clearly evident that all of the methods of transportation increased
overtime
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over time
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.
However
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, the metro was the most used
while
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 , the train was a close second.
According to
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 what is shown in the table
that
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the most used kind of public transportation was the metro it began in 2010 with around 3.0 and witnessed an upward trend over the entire time.
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, trains
was
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 the second most used. It started
with
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 approximately 1.4 and saw an increase until it hit about 3.6
2014
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in 2014
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.
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 trams increased modestly,
it
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they
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 started
with
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at
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 roughly around 1.3 and ended
with
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at
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 nearly 2.2.
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, taxi cars
was
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 the least preferred way it began with 0.6 and saw a slight increase by 0.4.
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, using the bus started around 1.0 and saw a decrease in 2011 by almost 0.2 to hit 0.8 and after that experienced an increase over the three period of time and hit 2.4 and 2014.

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language
Make sure to use full sentences and check for grammatical errors, especially in verb forms and articles.
structure
Organize your paragraphs clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea to improve flow.
details
Provide specific examples clearly, like exact figures or trends to strengthen your points.
content
You have included important figures from the data and made comparisons between different forms of transport.
clarity
Your essay has a clear overall trend that makes it easy to understand the main points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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