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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph at the top of the page gives data on the relationship between
age
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 and
crime
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 in the UK
at
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in
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year
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the year
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 2024,
while
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 that at the bottom shows the percentage of the types of
crime
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 executed by these individuals.
Overall
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, the vast majority of
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crime
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crimes
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 are committed at the
age
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 of 20 and it is evident that
,
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 violent
crime
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 has been the most prevalent among the four violations.
Report
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The report
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 shows that the very first
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last
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 year
begins
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began
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 at the
age
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12
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of 12
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 accounting
to
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for
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 a 5,000 count,
then
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 it remarkably increased to 70,000 at
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the 16th
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,
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 and peaked at
80,000
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the 80,000
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 mark by
age
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 20.
On the other hand
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, there is a noticeable decline of 20 thousand at
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 24 from its peak, before it reached the
age
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 of 28 where there is a slow but continuous decrease until it reached the golden years to almost zero.
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, a huge percentage of
felony
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felonies
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 reported in the UK
on
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in
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 the same year (2024)
is
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were
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 violent
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crime
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crimes
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 with almost half of the fraction,
whereas
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 a few
number of
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apply
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public order
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crime
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crimes
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 were only at 9%. Both property
crime
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 and drug
crime
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 shared almost the same proportion with 23% and 22%, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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