Nowadays, people believe that governments should invest taxpayers’ money in healthcare, while others believe that money should be used in other areas. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

Many people nowadays argue that
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money is best used in
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,
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others think it should be used in other areas like fighting
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change.
This
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essay wants to explain why both topics are essential to our society and why
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believe
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should
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more seriously.
Firstly
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, staying
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healthy
and
beeing
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being
able to see a doctor for minor diseases can prevent expensive treatments later on. Germany has a similar concept, where everyone working is paying their insurance percentual from their salary. Whenever they become sick they can see a doctor for free and
dont
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don't
need to worry about huge payments.
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allows them to
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receive
the right care immediately and avoid costly medical care in the long run. Preventative medication helps
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workers back to work boosting the economy and with that tax income.
On the other hand
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, many believe that there are more pressing issues like
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change that require government funding. Those problems can have a large impact on society and if not dealt with can worsen
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humanity's
humanity
well
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being
drastically.
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, scientists have found 50
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bacteria in the
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Antarctica
, which will be freed
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the ice melting and come with unforseen dangers to everyone. Like
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, problems like
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should be accounted for, before the
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situation
gets uncontrollable. In conclusion,
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is an important part
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a working economy and ignoring it comes with many issues later on. The same goes for other topics like
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change which has to be resolved in the near future.
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, I
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that without
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people aren´t able to work on problems like the
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and
thus
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it is more important on a present scale.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invest
  • taxpayers
  • healthcare
  • government
  • money
  • areas
  • population
  • growth
  • stability
  • productive
  • economy
  • costs
  • treating
  • preventative
  • care
  • treatment
  • education
  • infrastructure
  • public safety
  • quality of life
  • pressing issues
  • climate change
  • poverty
  • funding
  • impact
  • society
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