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Many people think that money is the best gift to give a teenager, but others disagree. Discuss bot the views and give your opinion including relevant examples.

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Introduction
These days some people
argued
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 if it was
the
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apply
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money is the best
gift
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 to give a teenager,
whille
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while
 others do not agree with them, I believe the best present to
any one
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anyone
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 that you do not know
them
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apply
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much
is
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about is
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the
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money, in
this
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essay
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essay,
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 we will discuss both
veiws
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views
 and I will share my opinion about it
inclouded
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included
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 some examples.
Body · 1
On
one
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the one
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 hand, many people
sees
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see
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 that
a
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cash is the best present
to
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for
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 a teenager
this
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mean
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means
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that, you
gave
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give
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 them
a
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apply
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freedom to pay
the
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for the
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 stuff they need
for example
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,
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 if she was a girl she would pay a makeup, and if he was a boy he
probbly
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probably
 going to pay a toy or something similar to it.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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, a lot of people prefer to bring a
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specific
specifec
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specific
 thing as a
gift
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, it is a meaningful
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something
someting
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something
 to them like I do,
In
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addition
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addition,
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 to be more clear when I want to
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make
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mak
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make
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someone
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some one
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someone
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 happy I most likely
looking
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look
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 for the stuff that makes them
smaile
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smile
 and pay it for them,
Conclusion
To wrap up, from my point of
veiw
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view
 giving cash as a
gift
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 would be the
safeist
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safest
 thing to do if you do not know the person will, but if you know them I would
recomend
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recommend
 you
to
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apply
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bring the things they love as a
gift
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.

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grammar
Make sure to use correct grammar and spelling to help your ideas come across clearly.
cohesion
Try to expand your points further and connect your ideas with linking words for better flow.
task achievement
When you introduce an argument, give more examples to clearly support your opinion.
clarity
You clearly stated your opinion on money as a gift.
awareness
You attempted to discuss both views, which shows understanding of the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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