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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people claim that it is acceptance to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There
is
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 many people
think
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who think
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 that
useing
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using
animals
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, (like
mouses
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) in medical
research
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 for
benefit
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the benefit
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 of human beings are equal,
while
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 others argue that it is wrong. I will give my opinion in the conclusion.
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, the
problm
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problem
 is
useing
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using
animals
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are
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 not just for medical
research
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, it is way more than that.
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,
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makeup brands usually
useing
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use
animals
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 to improve
thier
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their
 products.
Secondly
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, there are many ways to be sure about the medical
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,
becouse
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because
 they already
hved
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have
history
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a history
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 of
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research
 that
was using
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animals
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, and I think
that
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is
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it
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 will lead them to the same results.
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, 60%
from
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of
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 medical
researchs
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research
researchers
researches
were end
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at
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 the same results, as
the
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Medknow said.
Now days
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, doctors are able to use many things and many ways to impact
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medical
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, we are in 2025 and there
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 many solutions.
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, with
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AI technology, we can improve
many
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apply
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medical
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, if we
development
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the
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AI technology to help us with the
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 we need. In
the
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conclusion,
animals
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also
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souls
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, and it is not equal for them to be used by humans
on
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this
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 way, they
also
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 have feelings, we are not God, and we can not decide
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 path of living and death.
To sum up
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, I do not agree with people
think
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who think
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 that
useing
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using
animals
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, in medical
research
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 for
benefit
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the benefit
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 of human
beings
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beings,
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 are equal, and
iI
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I
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 see it
worng
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wrong
working
.

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language
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. For example, 'useing' should be 'using', and 'problm' should be 'problem'.
structure
Organize your essay better by grouping similar ideas together. Use clear paragraphs for each point you make.
clarity
Use clearer examples and explanations. Some sentences are hard to understand, try to explain your ideas more clearly.
content
You provided a personal opinion in the conclusion, which is good for this kind of essay.
content
You mentioned modern technology, like AI, which is a relevant point in today’s discussions.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biomedical research
  • ethical dilemma
  • inhumane treatment
  • alternative methodologies
  • animal welfare
  • regulatory standards
  • clinical trials
  • synthetic models
  • genetic engineering
  • bioethics
  • sentience
  • pharmacological safety
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