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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.
The given graph below illustrates information about the sum of
world
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population
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 in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, there is
also
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 a prediction for 2050.
Overall
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, it can be observed that the
percentage
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 of
population
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 in
China
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 was the highest in 1950 and 2002,
while
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 the lowest
one
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 was true for
Japan
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 in both 3 years.
Additionally
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, the
percentage
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 of the total
world
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population
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 in India had increased in 3 years ( 1950, 2002 and 2050 ). In 1950, the
percentage
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 of total
world
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 poplation in
China
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 was aorund 23%, the highest
one
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 among 4 countries. In connection with
China
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, exactly 15% of the total
world
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population
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 was Indian,
while
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 there was around 7% and 4% for the USA and
Japan
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, respectively.
Similarly
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, in 2002 ,there was 20% of
world
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population
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 living in
China
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, followed by around 17% of individuals who lived in India. The total
population
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 in the USA and
Japan
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 accounted for 5% and 3% of
world
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population
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.
This
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 analysis will focus on the predictions of scientist in 2050. In 2050 the
percentage
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 of India
population
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 is likely to be the highest
one
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, at around 19%, which overtaken
China
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 at 15%. The
percentage
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 of the total
world
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population
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 in the USA is going to be the same as in 2002 , at exactly 5%.
In contrast
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,
Japan
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population
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 will be the lowest
one
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 in 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population, percentage, china, one, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • countries
  • 1950
  • 2003
  • projections
  • 2050
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
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