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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

The technological era has seen many advancements, of which the
internet
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 has been popular
amongst
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 many. Social media and online press organisations have
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 become more relevant.
This
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 has meant that more traditional
news
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 outlets like
newspapers
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 have become less popular. I wholeheartedly agree with
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 sentiment because
news
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 websites are easier to access and provide more
up to date
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information
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 on worldwide events.
In contrast
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,
newspapers
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 and magazines have to be printed earlier in the morning,
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 they could miss out on events that happen later in the day.
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 with,
newspapers
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 have been a source of reliable
news
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 for the past couple
years
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. Proponents of it argue that
information
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propogated
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propagated
 online may be misleading and even completely false. They refer to the many false
news
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articles
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 and fake videos uploaded as
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 against its infallibility.
However
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, the
internet
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 houses a plethora of reliable
news
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 institutes that only post fact-checked
information
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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,
information
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 on the
internet
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 can be quickly falsified and debunked,
whereas
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, physical
newspapers
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 are in circulation until the next copy is printed.
This
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 may lead to false
news
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 being reported and consumed for a whole day before being corrected. Many cite that
newspapers
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 have become a habitual part of their daily routine. They argue that it is easier to stay focused when one reads a
newspaper
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 compared to a screen
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 can be very distracting. I put forth that for many individuals reading a physical
newspaper
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 is not a viable option
due to
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 their busy schedules. Online
articles
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 are easily accessible on almost all smartphones in almost all settings, whether it is on the way to work or at the gym.
Furthermore
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, online
articles
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 will keep people up to date on global events that interest them.
In contrast
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, many
newspaper
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 providers will either bring local
news
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 or fill the paper with irrelevant
articles
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.
This
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 makes it harder for the average reader to be intrigued by its content,
thus
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 causing a decline in its popularity. In summary,
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newspaper
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 have been a vital step in dispersing
news
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 to the masses at a large scale.
However
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,
due to
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 the nature of the
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internet
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 being easily accessible and tailored to each reader's interests, it has risen in popularity. People expect updates at a quicker rate than before, which the preprinted press cannot keep up with.

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion.
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You presented a clear opinion and supported it with reasons.
coherence cohesion
Your points are relevant and your argument is logical.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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