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Green Fitness Some people believe that the fittest and strongest individuals and teams succeed in sports. Others think that success in sports depends on mental attitudes.Discuss bith the views and give your opinions

_who wants____ to get fit - and help the environment? Most of us know we 2__ must help
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 the environment more. One of 3_3.the largest
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 problems we have is plastic pollution. Of course, exercise 4_4.is harder_ if you don't drink 5__any
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 water. I 6__6.am using_ plastic bottles at the moment but I 7__ am going to use___ a reusable bottle more in the future. I spoke to someone 8___who
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 said that she 9__ used to drink
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 from plastic bottles but learnt how many millions of new bottles 10__10.are produced
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 every year. 11__ How about running
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 to work? I have been jogging to work 12___for__ three years. It was hard at first but I run much 13__ more energetically___ now. You 14__don't have to be
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 really fit to start, everyone needs to start somewhere. 15___Have you ever taken__ part in a neighborhood
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? I 16___will help
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 you join one if you want. I 17__ have been organizig___ community workout tidy-ups since 2015, and I 18__have organised
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 over fifteen of these events
this
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 year alone all by 19___myself__. I first 20__was having___ the idea
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 I was living in my old, dirty apartment block.

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task response
Make sure to clearly express your main ideas in the introduction and conclusion. This will help your reader understand your message better.
coherence cohesion
Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and make the flow smoother between sentences and paragraphs.
task response
You have introduced a relevant topic about fitness and the environment, which is interesting and important.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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