Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

todays

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world, privacy has become a less

commen

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common

thing in

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celebrities

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celebrities'

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personal

lives

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due to

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everyone's access to

internet

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, the

lives

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of famous

people

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gets

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shared online easily and no one has

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control over what they want to share with the public and what they want to keep secret. First of all, sharing

privet

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lives

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people

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is wrong. It doesn'

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matter who the person is and how famous they are. Secretly taking pictures of

people

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and sharing them on social media is never the right thing to do. Even though individuals who become famous expect less privacy

but

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there should be a

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boundary

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, taking

picture

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while

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the person is being discharged from

hospital

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and posting them online, isn'

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the right thing to do.

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Also

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another point that everyone seems to forget these days and

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to be

remineded

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reminded

constently

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constantly

is that

celebrities

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are still human beings.Having a privet life is a basic human right. If your

favorite

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celebrity doesn'

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want a

media covered

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wedding you have to respect their wishes and stop judging them for making that decision.

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of the day, it's their life and their wedding. Another thing worth mentioning

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stakers

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stalkers

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and

wierdly

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weirdly

obsessed fans. Stalkers and these

wierdly

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weirdly

obsessed fans

that

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are more often called sasaeng fans, mostly share the

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celebrities

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celebrity's

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privet

lives

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or disturb them just for "fun" and they don'

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care about the damage that they do to these

individuals

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lives

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mental

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and physical health. If

people

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stop sharing these stalkers and crazy obsessed

fand

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social

medias

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media

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and ignore them, these

harrasments

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harassment

will come to

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stop. Because when there is no more audience these disturbings and secretly taken pictures will no longer be fun. In conclusion, I totally agree that

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celebrities

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celebrities'

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lives

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should not be openly shared either on social media or

any where

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else.

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of the

day

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we need to remember that even famous

people

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are just

people

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, and being famous doesn'

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mean that they have to share everything all the time.

tabasom nikkhahTue Jun 10 2025

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Work on using correct spelling and grammar. Review words like 'private' instead of 'privet' and 'constantly' instead of 'constently'.

task achievement

Add more specific examples to support your points, making them stronger and clearer.

task achievement

You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is good for task response.

coherence and cohesion

Your conclusion nicely summarizes your view and reinforces your argument.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

342 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Invasion of privacy
Media scrutiny
Public persona
Personal autonomy
Sensationalism
Paparazzi
Tabloid journalism
Right to privacy
Mental well-being
Public interest
Ethical journalism
Celebrity culture
Gossip columns

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