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As can be seen from the diagram, there exist great changes in the average life expectarcy among six different countres. It is clear from the chart that Monaco has the highest average life apeaiancy, reaching nearly 90 years The USA follows, with an average life expectancy of around 80. plus years.The Philippines has an average life expectancy of about 70 years. Laes and Ruanda show relatively lower figures, with average life expectancies of approximately 60and 50- pus years respectively. Kenya has the lowest average life, expectancy among these countries, standing at around 50 years. Orerall, the average life expectaney in Monaco is the highest, that in Kenya is the lowest, and those in the other countries are quite similar

As can be seen from the diagram, there exist great changes in the average life expectarcy among six different countres. It is clear from the chart that Monaco has the highest average life apeaiancy, reaching nearly 90 years The USA follows, with an average life expectancy of around 80. plus years.The Philippines has an average life expectancy of about 70 years. Laes and Ruanda show relatively lower figures, with average life expectancies of approximately 60and 50- pus years respectively. Kenya has the lowest average life, expectancy among these countries, standing at around 50 years. Orerall, the average life expectaney in Monaco is the highest, that in Kenya is the lowest, and those in the other countries are quite similar
As can be seen from the diagram, there exist great changes in the average
life
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expectarcy
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expectancy
 among six different
countres
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countries
. It is clear from the chart that Monaco has the highest average
life
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apeaiancy
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appearance
, reaching nearly 90
years
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 The USA follows, with an average
life
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 expectancy of around 80. plus
years
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.The Philippines has an average
life
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 expectancy of about 70
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. Laes and Ruanda show relatively lower figures, with average
life
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 expectancies of approximately
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60 and
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plus
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years
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 respectively. Kenya has the lowest average
life
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, expectancy among these countries, standing at around 50
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Overall
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expectancy
 in Monaco is the highest, that in Kenya is the lowest, and those in the other countries are quite similar

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