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11 June 2025, These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, rapid technological development has made it easier for people to travel abroad,
whereas
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in
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 the past, international travel was mostly limited to work-related or official purposes. I believe that the benefits of
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 trend outweigh the drawbacks. On the positive side,
traveling
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travelling
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 to other countries increases the chance of
culture
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cultural
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 exchange. It can decrease
stereotype
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stereotypes
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 and
increase
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 international tolerance.
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, Bali has many
temple
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when
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where
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foreigner
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foreigners
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come
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apply
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should use certain
fabric
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fabrics
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as
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for
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 politeness, from here they can learn about
culture
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the culture
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in
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 Bali.
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, easy access
for
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to
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holiday
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holidays
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 abroad not only has benefits for tourists but
also
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helping
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local
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the local
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 economy to develop. Many tourism
industry
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industries
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 in destination countries will grow
such
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 as hostelry, restaurants, transportation, and local enterprises. To exemplify, the expenditure from tourism in South Korea shared the largest expenditure among other sectors since K-pop’s global success.
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, in my view, the convenience of overseas holidays
offer
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offers
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 valuable experience to the public, and it
make
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helps
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 countries
increase
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economy
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their economy
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, especially for their population. On the negative side,
over tourism
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 can
damaged
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 the destination environment, because, the place is not capable
to accommodate
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of accommodating
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 many people at the same time
especially
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, especially
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 in certain months or special events.
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, in Paris,
many
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apply
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rubbish
scattered
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is scattered
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 and
grass
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the grass
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died
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dies
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 cause many
step
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steps
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on
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,
it makes
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making
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 Paris not
beauty
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 again. At the same time,
aviation
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the aviation
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 industry produces carbon emissions, which means that if the passenger numbers for international
flight
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flights
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 are high, emission levels
increase
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 and
higher
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apply
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the
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apply
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contribution
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on
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to
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 climate change. In
this
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 case, environmental impacts
increase
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. In conclusion, having analysed both merits and demerits, I believe that it
gain
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more
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a more
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 beneficial impact rather than negative consequence from easy travel abroad trend.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and support it.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas better, such as 'first', 'next', 'finally'.
task achievement
Provide more examples or details to support your points.
task achievement
Try to explain why easy travel helps the economy in more detail.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
task achievement
You mention culture exchange and economic benefits, which are good points.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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