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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how India's gross domestic product varied from sectors including agriculture, industry and
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 between 1960 and 2000. As seen, agriculture - which was the top contributor to India's
GDP
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 - experienced a drastic plummet, commencing from just over 60% of
GDP
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 in 1960, and shrinking to the marginal figure of approximately 13% in 2000, when the commitment to it can be considered the least negligible.
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, there was a precipitously upward trajectory found in the benefits of
service
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the service
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sector
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. Accounting for a mere 18% of
GDP
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 in 1960, which is by far less than that for
farming
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the farming
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,
service
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the service
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sector
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 had an increasingly large influence on India's national economy especially after 1980, doubling from almost 30% of
GDP
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 in 1980 to even above 60% of that in 2000, rendering 1990 the milestone when financial impact of
services
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sector
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 outnumbered that of farming. Unlike these considerable changes in farming and
services
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, both the figure and oscillation of industry were much less significant. The first two decades witnessed a gradual climb, rising from 16% of
GDP
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 in 1960 to nearly 25% of that in 1980, reaching its zenith. From 1980 onwards, a stable figure can be found throughout the remaining period, levelling off at 25%, listing the second place in rankings. In conclusion, the distribution of influence of
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 sectors shifted a lot during four decades, with
services
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 soaring to the top
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 a plunge experienced by agriculture.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, gdp, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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