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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you have left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter •Say where you think you left the papers •Explain why they are so important •Tell the manager what you want him/her to do

Dear
hotel
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 manager, Hello, I hope everything is going fine with you, I am Dr M. Reza Ghorbani, a veterinarian who participated in the veterinary symposium which was held in your
hotel
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 three days ago. I am writing to you to inform you that I have left some of my important documents related to the symposium in my room at the
hotel
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. I took part in the aforementioned meeting at your
hotel
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 to achieve new certificates regarding small animal surgery for my career promotion and to be eligible to establish a clinic of my own. I had a flight home scheduled for five hours after finishing the conference;
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, I
got
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noticed that the flight plan
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 changed, and I had to reach the airport three hours earlier than the predetermined time.
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, I packed my stuff hastily after the conference and left the symposium certificates in a drawer placed near the bed in my room. Concerning the fact that conference certificates are highly demanded for establishing my clinic, I adjure you to send me the
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 license papers; the sooner, the better. I am highly thankful to read my letter, and I am looking forward to hearing you as soon as possible. Sincerely, Dr M. Reza Ghorbani 6/8/2023

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state what you want the manager to do, such as asking them to inform you about the documents or to send them to you directly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to organize your points in a clearer way. For example, you can have a separate paragraph about why the documents are important.
Task Achievement
Be careful with some phrases, like 'I adjure you,' which may sound too strong. You could say, 'I kindly ask you' instead to keep it polite.
Positive Highlight
You clearly identified yourself and the purpose of your letter.
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The letter has a polite tone, which is appropriate for this type of communication.
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