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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and imagination than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer

In my opinion, engaging in enjoyable
activtiyes
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activities
 with
childern
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children
 can
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establish
a good skills
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good skills
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 with them,
such
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 as but not
limit
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 to
a
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problem solving
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problem-solving
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 skills, social skills and
creative
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creativity
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.
Activites
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Activities
 like art, music and sport allow children and our
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selves
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 to express
feeling
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feelings
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 and develop imagination
than
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more than
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 reading. listening to music can help with imagination as well
reading
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as reading
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 books,
while
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 reading enhances
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vocabulary
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Make sure your introduction clearly states your main opinion on the topic.
coherence cohesion
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Try to give more clear examples to support your ideas.
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You mention good skills that activities can develop.
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You use a variety of enjoyable activities that can help children.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • engaging
  • imaginative play
  • hands-on experience
  • social skills
  • problem-solving
  • creative expression
  • cooperation
  • solitary
  • practical application
  • retention
  • cognitive development
  • interactive learning
  • exploration
  • emotional intelligence
  • critical thinking
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