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Band 2

Many employees are able to work at home due to modern technology. Some people claim that it can benefit only the workers, not the employers. Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays,
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technology
helped
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the
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employees
working
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 from home,
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 some
people
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asum
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argue
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 only good for
workers
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,
which
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I believe working
remotly
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remotely
 is a positive development and
have
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 a strong impact
for
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the
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both sides.
To begin
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 with, technology has been improving recently
alot
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a lot
 which makes working from home easier, faster, and
geting
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getting
 the job done on time,
according to
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 a recent study 26% of employees prefer to
working
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 online rather
on
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 being on-site,
as a result
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 of that, the outcome will be higher for sure, which I think it is a positive development that has a great
affect
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 on both
workers
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 and employees.
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 some
people
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 believe that
,
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 working online only benefits the
workers
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 and the
reasone
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reason
 behind
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 is that, some
people
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 used to think,
working
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that working
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remotly
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remotely
as
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 a holiday and they will not
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finish
 their tasks on time.
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 but not least many
people
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 claim that working from home during
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improvment
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improvement
,
have
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 only one good side and it will
be benefit
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benefit
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 the
workers
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 only
while
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 I disagree with them.

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You have presented your opinion clearly.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • flexible working hours
  • overhead costs
  • corporate social responsibility
  • employee retention
  • carbon footprint
  • global talent pool
  • peak productivity times
  • job satisfaction
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