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The plan below shows a student room for two people and a student room for one person at an Australian university

The
two
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 diagrams illustrate the layout and features of
two
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 types of student accommodation at an Australian university: one designed for
two
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 people and the other for a single occupant.
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, both rooms share a similar structure and basic kitchen facilities, but the
two
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-person
room
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 is more spacious and includes additional furniture to accommodate shared living. It is
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 more expensive than
the
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 single
room
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. The
room
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 for one person measures 6 metres in length and 2.5 metres in width. It contains a single bed, one study desk, a bookshelf, and a small kitchen area equipped with a stove, microwave, and sink. The bathroom is located in the top-left corner, and there is no designated dining or social area.
This
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 option costs $200 per week. In comparison, the
two
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-person
room
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 is wider, measuring 6 by 4 metres. It includes
two
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 beds positioned on opposite sides of the
room
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, each accompanied by a study desk and a bookshelf. A round table with
two
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 chairs is provided in the centre of the
room
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 for shared use, and a television is mounted on the wall. The kitchen and bathroom are similar to those in the single
room
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 but are designed to serve
two
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 people.
This
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room
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 is priced at $350 per week.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to provide a clear conclusion or summary at the end to emphasize the differences between the two types of rooms.
coherence and cohesion
Try to group similar ideas together in paragraphs to improve the flow of your writing.
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Include more specific details about the features of each room, such as sizes or additional furniture, to enhance clarity.
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Good comparison between the two types of rooms.
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Clear description of furniture and layout in both rooms.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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