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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where reevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where reevant.
The two maps illustrated above
indicates
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development
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the development
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 of the road access to a
city
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 hospital between 2007 and 2010.
According
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According to
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 the map of the
city
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 hospital
2007
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in 2007
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, there was a single
one way
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one-way
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 route that followed
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city
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the city
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 road to Hospital
Rd
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. Six bus stops with three on
eahc
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the
west
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east
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 and east
side
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sides
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 of
the
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apply
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Hospital
Rd
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 in 2007, alternated with a bus station on east to Hospital
Rd
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 in 2010.
Additionally
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, there is a significant change in car park structure between 2007 and 2010.
While
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 a car park included both staff and public and was on
west
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the west
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 to Hospital
Rd
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 in 2007, it was
seperated
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separated
 by a roundabout in 2010. As shown in
2010
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the 2010
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 map,
staff
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the staff
a staff
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 parking lot is on the opposite lane of
bus
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the bus
a bus
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 station and has an
enterance
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entrance
 from the second roundabout, and public parking is on
west
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the west
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 of the
city
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 hospital.
In
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Overall
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overall
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, these significant changes between 2007 and 2010 created more
speace
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space
 for each parking lot.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, rd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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