The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the percentage of unemployed people aged between 15 and 24 in five European countries in 2005, compared with the overall percentage of unemployment in those countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar graph illustrates
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information about the percentage of unemployed young people in different countries in 2005, compared with
all-generations
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an all-generations
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ratio of
unemployment
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in the same locations.
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, these places are divided into Poland, Italy,
Hungary
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, Germany, and Denmark. It is remarkable that Poland has the highest proportion of people who do not have a job,
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Denmark has the lowest figure for both categories. To dig deeper, in 2005, Poland located
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the top of
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate for adults at 37% and the
overall
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unemployment
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was 15%. Italy and
Hungary
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had a similar number in the total of
unemployment
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at 8%,
while
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in
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other
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hand, Italy had more than
Hungary
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by
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approximately 5%. Germany had the unemployed people
in
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aged around 15 to 24
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than Italy and
Hungary
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.
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, in terms of all populations, Germany was higher than those two places at 10%.
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, Denmark
placed
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in
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the bottom of
unemployment
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rates.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, hungary with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • youth unemployment
  • overall unemployment
  • comparison
  • percentage
  • aged between
  • economic conditions
  • educational system
  • vocational training
  • long-term impacts
  • policy changes
  • job training programs
  • disparity
  • national unemployment rates
  • European countries
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