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The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts below show the number of people in Europe who were affected by four types of noise by day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
The bar charts illustrate the number of
people
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 in Europe (in millions) affected by four types of
noise
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 pollution—traffic, train, aircraft, and industry—during the
day
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 and at
night
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 in urban and rural
areas
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 in 2007.
Overall
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,
noise
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 pollution affected significantly more
people
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 in urban
areas
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 than in rural
areas
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, with traffic being the most prevalent source in both settings.
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, industrial
noise
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 had the least impact, particularly in rural
areas
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 where it was negligible.
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 levels from trains and aircraft
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 showed a consistent decline from urban to rural
areas
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. In
cities
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, traffic
noise
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 affected the largest number of
people
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, with 64
million
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 impacted during the
day
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 and 48
million
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 at
night
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.
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 these numbers were lower in rural
areas
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, traffic
noise
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 still remained the most significant source, affecting 34
million
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people
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 during the
day
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 and 24
million
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 at
night
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. Train
noise
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 was the second most common source in
cities
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, impacting 10
million
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 during the
day
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 and 8
million
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 at
night
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, but these figures fell to 8 and 6
million
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, respectively, in rural
areas
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. Aircraft
noise
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 affected comparatively fewer
people
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, with 4
million
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 impacted during the
day
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 and 1
million
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 at
night
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 in
cities
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. In rural
areas
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, these numbers dropped
further
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 to 2
million
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 during the
day
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 and 1
million
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 at
night
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. Industrial
noise
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 had the smallest impact
overall
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, affecting just 1
million
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people
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 during the
day
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 and 0.25
million
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 at
night
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 in
cities
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,
while
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 it was non-existent in rural
areas
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. These trends highlight the much greater prevalence of
noise
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 pollution in urban
areas
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 compared to rural regions.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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