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There is a sports stadium near your home where large number of people come to watch games each weekend. This cause you and your neighbours some problems. Write aletter to the local council . In your letter- -explain who you are and where you live -describe the problem -suggest what the local council should do

Dear Sir , I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention to a serious matter which is causing
problem
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problems
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 for the local residents .
A loud
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Loud
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 noises have been experienced by the people
which
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 are coming from the stadium. My name is Harvi and I am living at 65 Munch Avenue Cambridge, Ontario. There is a sports stadium within walking distance from my house and a large number of audiences come to watch matches each weekend . I am a student
therefore
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, I am struggling to concentrate on my studies .I am afraid that I will not be able to perform
100
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at 100
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% in my final exams which will
starting from
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start
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the
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apply
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next week. I want to request you to please refrain not to
organize
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organising
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 any sports
event
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events
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 for at least a month so , I can prepare for my final test with
a
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great enthusiasm without any disturbance
as a result
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,
i
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 will achieve
desired
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the desired
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 marks .
Moreover
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, the audience
park
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 their vehicles on the street which caused
nuisance
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 for the local people. Please arrange
an extra parking facilities
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extra parking facilities
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 for them so, local people can live peacefully. I hope you will like my suggestions and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Harvi

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Task Response
Make sure to explain the problem in more detail, and how it affects you and your neighbors.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to link your ideas more clearly. Use words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' for better flow.
Task Response
Use a clear and polite request for action from the council. It helps to sound respectful and urgent.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, which is good for a formal letter.
Task Achievement
You identified your problem and proposed solutions, which is important for the task.
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