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Band 3.5

Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should therefore be dealt with by the government, while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

،Nowadays, environmental problems are increasing rapidly, starting from global warming to
floodings
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 and other
phenomenens
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phenomena
 that pose a threat to the well-being of our planet.
Therefore
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,
poeple
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people
 argue about who is
the
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responsible
of
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for
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 dealing with
this
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 issue
and
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Some think that it is the
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government
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government's
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duity
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duty
 to
takle
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take
 it,
while
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 others think that it can be only
handeled
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handled
 by
indiviuals
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individuals
. In my view I
belief
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 that both should unite
togeather
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together
.
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 with, some people think that the
government
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 has to solve
this
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 problem since it is in status that allows
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it
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to make a significant impact.
For instance
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,
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government
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the government
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 can helps
saving
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to save
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 the environment by restricting poaching and
deforstation
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deforestation
, which
considers
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are considered
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 two of the main factors that
harming
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harm
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the
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biodiversity and ecological balance.
On the other hand
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, others claim that everyone
take
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responsebility
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responsibility
of
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for
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 their actions and that no one can save the environment but them by replacing the
useage
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use
 of plastic
by
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with
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 environmentally friendly materials.
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, everybody must reduce the consumption of water and start purchasing devices that work
by
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 solar energy. In my opinion, I believe that both parties should collab to face
this
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 issue, as it can’t be addressed without a combination of
self-awarnece
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self-awareness
 and
interferance
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interference
 of impactful
authoreties
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authorities
. In conclusion,
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government
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the government
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 should take measures and start
an
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apply
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action to limit the causes of environmental disasters, whilst every person
have
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has
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 to contribute
in
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to
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this
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 process, because working
togeather
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together
 is more efficient.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. It helps to guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Try to use more linking words to connect your ideas smoothly; it will help the flow of your essay.
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Use clearer examples to support your points. Specific details make your arguments stronger.
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You included both sides of the argument, which is good for discussion essays.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes the main idea well and shows the importance of teamwork.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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