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The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar compares various alibis for not attending a workplace by one specific European country's staff. The data was gathered in a study, which was conducted in the periods of 2000, 2005 and 2010.
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, at first
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 it is vividly clear that being sick was the most frequent cause to miss a working day throughout the stated decade.
Whereas
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, tiredness and stress were considered as the least popular excuse. Diving deep,
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 the
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statistics
 in the early 19th century employers had to skip their scheduled working shifts
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 their poor health conditions. In the initial
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 it was almost 45%, which gradually declined by 5% in each period and reached 35%
at the end
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 of the survey, which still was leading the top rates among all other mentioned reasons. The following
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outstanding
 reason
of
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 not attending was family obligations, remarkably the data illustrates striking
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resemblances
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 through the selected milestone, approximately 27% in 2000 and a quarter
percent
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 in the following years.
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 to individual ailments workers failed to appear in their
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comperatively
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comparatively
 more in the final year rather than the previous years. To be more precise, in 2010 it
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accounted for over 23%
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 it had been under 15%
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 the beginning of the survey.
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Spontaneous
 issues were
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 a reason not to be present,
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 it went through some oscillations, 7%, 14% and 13% in turn.
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, the percentage of occupants who
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 not able to go out
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 mental issues
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 as stress illustrated a
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fluctuating
 figure, with some oscillations from nearly 6% it plunged to roughly 14% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "oscillations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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