Despite health warning,a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world.Why should we be concerned about this ?What solutions would you suggest?

In today`s era, young

people

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have

smoking

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a smoking

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addiction which is bad for

health

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the health

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of an individual.

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problem is everywhere in all the countries of the world. In my opinion, the problem is because

the

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addiction and passion of the

people

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while

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solution

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the solution

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is they have to control their addiction and

government

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the government

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should increase

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tax

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the tax

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on smoking

products

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and need to stop

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the advertisement

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this

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these

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products

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with,

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tabaco

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tobacco

can cause serious health issues,

same

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such

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as cancer and

diabities

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diabetes

, by smoking can easily invite

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this kind

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these kinds

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deises

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diseases

Tabaco

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can harm so badly in human body,

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can lead to death.

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population

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is now addicted

with

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this

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kind of

addictions

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addiction

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, and

also

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people

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smoking

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smoke

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to show their passion to others,

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this

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which

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can lead to danger in the end.

People

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are

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apply

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learn smoking from family and friends, so they don`t need to promote with friends.

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reseach

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research

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the university

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university

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of New York says that

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apply

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all the younger learn smoking from their friends and family. In order to stop

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people

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should understand

disadvantages

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the disadvantages

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of smoking by

self

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themselves

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, and

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the governmnet

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governmnet

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government

should play

their

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role. Ministry can put

restiction

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restriction

restrictions

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kind of

products

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, as they can restrict

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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286 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

respiratory illnesses
healthcare systems
air pollution
cigarette butts
wildlife
marine life
deforestation
pesticide use
economic loss
absenteeism
early mortality
tobacco farming
second-hand smoke
strict regulations
higher taxes
smoking bans
advertising restrictions
support systems
counseling
smoking cessation
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