Details of politician's privte lives should not be published in newspaper. To what extent do you agree od disagree?

There is no denying the fact that
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personal
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should not
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in
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different media platforms.
While
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it is a commonly held belief that it is a good idea to have news and reports about
politicians
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'
lives
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, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion. I consider that their
lives
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should be protected.
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with, it is a fundamental right for
people
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in general to have privacy.
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, it is crucial that every human being have their own
lives
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without
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interference
from
the
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others.
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, nowadays we live in a massive digital container where every news and detail
on
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the
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social media.
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, we barely see no one without access or have a social media
accout
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account
where they follow everything about everyone including
celebarties
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celebrities
and
politicians
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. Another point to consider, by sharing famous
people
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's and
politicians
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'
lives
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we invade their world. It is possible to say that, we will get access to
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very
sensitve
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sensitive
information about their families which will they not be safe and will feel insecure. It is
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possible to say that, some individuals like the idea of spying and to know every detail about famous
people
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, especially
politicians
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.
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,
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saw once on the Gurdian's website an article about how
people
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enjoy
to track
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and
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every tiny
details
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of
politicians
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'
lives
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and seeing how they live. In conclusion, despite the
existance
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existence
of different views, I believe that we should protect
politicians
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'
lives
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and not
to
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share any part of their
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and put very restricted measurements for those who publish any news about them.

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coherence and cohesion
Your introduction should clearly state your opinion on the topic. Be sure to connect your ideas more smoothly.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to support your main points. This will help in making your argument stronger.
language accuracy
Make sure to check for spelling and grammar errors, such as 'intervence' should be 'interference' and 'celebarties' should be 'celebrities'.
task achievement
You present clear reasons for your opinion, which is a good way to start your argument.
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