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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.
The pie graph illustrates the variations in the cost of money every year by a specific
school
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 in
UK
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the UK
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 between in three separate years.
Overall
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, teachers' salaries accounted for the largest proportion,
while
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 insurance experienced the lowest performance in
school
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 spending among
three
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the three
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 years. First of all, the figures of teachers' salaries remained the largest percentage in total workers' wages
which
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, which
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 began at 40% in 1981,
grown
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grew
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 to 50% in 1991, and dropped to 45% in 2001.
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by
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By
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 contrast, the proportion of other workers' wages constantly dropped from 28% in 1981 to 15% in 2001.
Additionally
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, insurance dominated the lowest share of
school
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 spending, which increased from 2% in 1981 to 8% in 2001.
Furthermore
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, the amount of both furniture and equipment witnessed
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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 in three years. It started from 15% in 1981, decreased approximately 10% in 1991, and significantly climbed to 23% in 2001. The
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 trend was
also
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 seen in the
school
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 cost on resources,
who
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which
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 began at 15% in 1981, increased to 20%
inn
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in
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 1991, and fell to 9% in 2001.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenditure
  • financial management
  • infrastructure investment
  • evolution of costs
  • annual spending
  • strategic funding
  • capital outlay
  • operational costs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal trends
  • cost analysis
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