Some countries allow the young above 18 years to drive,drink or married. Some countries don't. Give reasons along with personal experience and what do you think is the ideal age for taking adult responsibilities.
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Task Response
Your ideas are not fully clear. Try to explain your thoughts in a more detailed way.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use simple linking words (like 'first', 'second', 'finally') to help make your ideas flow better.
Task Achievement
You show an understanding of different views on responsibility. This is a good start!
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
Some individuals suggest that teenagers should give equal attention to all subjects, while others argue that they should prioritize the subjects that they find most engaging. While there are advantages to both views, I believe that teenagers should focus on all subjects equally.
The nature-vs-nurture debate concerns whether a special talent such as music or sport is innate from birth or gained by lots of training. Each side of such debate has valid arguments to support their perspectives; here I will discuss both views and provide a balanced framework to think about this issue.
In the contemporary era, the means of accessing news have expanded significantly, including traditional sources like newspapers, radios, and television, as well as the dynamic realm of the internet. Each medium has unique advantages, but, in my perspective, the internet is the most effective way to obtain news due to its immediacy, diversity, and interactive nature.
It is undoubtedly true that people living in metropolitan cities nowadays face a plethora of issues in their daily lives. The biggest problem is that the increasing population moving to the city leads to many major problems such as crime and poverty. To tackle this dilemma, the government should plan meticulously before encouraging people to move to smaller areas.
Nowadays, fashion plays an important role among individuals. Especially, due to Instagram and other social applications, people are more attracted towards fashionable clothes. However, there is always a change in clothing styles and people try to stick to the latest trend. I think it is affecting people and the environment in a negative way and this essay will outline some examples and a conclusion to support my view.