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some people claim that not enough waste from homes is recyled. They say that the only way to increase recyling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To extent do you think laws are needed to make people recyle more of their waste.

Some individuals think that the waste from houses is not sufficiently reprocessed. Somehow they believe in order to elevate recycling, states should make it a statutory obligation.
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 of forcing people, governments can initiate household campaigns and
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 in children the importance of
reuse
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 in schools. Humans are usually lazy about spreading rubbish because they do not know how to do it and do not have enough desire. Launching household campaigns could be helpful for the purpose of motivating and guiding citizens. Governments can collaborate with marketing companies with the aim of convincing people
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an
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exchange or accept some amount of discount.
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Germany
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 every street has its own converting machine. Citizens fetch their plastic litter to get money from the machine.
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 the development of recycling. Learning something at a young age helps us to apply it in our lives easily. Children are our future, inform them about the benefits of recycling in colleges and universities, or they can include a new school club about home waste. Those ideas surely would be one of the most impactful movements to improve reusability permanently.
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 BBC researchers, about 75% of students are good at using what they have learned at school in their daily lives. In conclusion,
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 of putting pressure on individuals or making them feel nervous, governments should guide and motivate them. They even need to generate new ideas because it feels more convenient.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly presents your opinion on the topic. Consider rephrasing it for clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words more frequently, like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally', to help the flow of your ideas throughout the essay.
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Add more detailed examples to support your points, which can make your arguments stronger and clearer to the reader.
task achievement
Good use of examples, like the recycling machine in Germany, showing a successful initiative.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your main points well, giving a clear end to the essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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