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For some people learning in a group is the most effective way, while others prefer one-on-one instruction. Discuss both views. What is your opinion?

It is
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irrefutable
 that learning in whole life provides
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numerous benefits in many ways. Some people believe
learning
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 in a
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,
whereas
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its
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their
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 opponents prefer one-on-one instructions for learning. In
this
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at the end
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. On
one
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 side, few individuals
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 that studying in a
group
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 is one the best methods. They
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 that it provides them
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collaborative environment where they can easily learn about many qualities
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 as being
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 and
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 to others.
Moreover
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, in batch
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tuition
, they can get more knowledge by listening
other
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 learner's ideas.
Furthermore
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, it is helpful in developing social skills
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 as motivation,
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work
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.
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 but not least,
group
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eaducation
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education
 is cost-effective for most
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people
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the people
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 as not every student or pupil belongs to
rich
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a rich
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faimly
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family
.
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 it has many negative
impact
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 on some students because it creates a risk of distraction from their
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studies
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. On the other side, One-on-one instruction provides scholars
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 concentration in learning.
For Example
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, as per an article
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 Hamdard
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 in 2023, during
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a science
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of student
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student
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students
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was
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were
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 individual learners who passed the quiz test.
In addition
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, it
is give
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gives
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 flexibility as any individual can get
lesson
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lessons
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accoroding
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according
 to
thier
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their
 best time,
for instance
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, in
morning
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the morning
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 or evening.
Moreover
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, they get proper attention from their
tutuor
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tutor
 as there is no time wasting
while
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 waiting for their turn.
However
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,
this
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due to
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teachers
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 for single
learner
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learners
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.
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According to
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 my opinion, learning in a
group
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 is
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a most-effective
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most-effective
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most effective
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 method of education
due to
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 its benefits in terms of social
skiils
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skills
 and less cost,
whereas
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issue
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the issue
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 of distraction can easily be
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 by setting our daily goals of completing study material.

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You introduced both sides of the argument clearly, showing good understanding of the topic.
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Some points about group learning and one-on-one instruction were well explained and relevant to the topic.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative
  • peer support
  • groupthink
  • individualized attention
  • adaptive learning
  • socio-academic
  • pedagogical
  • interpersonal skills
  • customized curriculum
  • self-paced learning
  • cost-effectiveness
  • mentorship
  • cognitive diversity
  • capacity-building
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