The line chart illustrates the figure for the price of three metals, copper, nickel, and zinc changed per month in the year 2014.

The line chart illustrates the figure for the price of three metals, copper, nickel, and zinc changed per month in the year 2014.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line chart illustrates the figure for the price of three metals, copper, nickel, and zinc changed per month in the year 2014.
The line chart illustrates the figure for the
price
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of three
metals
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, copper,
nickel
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, and zinc changed per month in the year 2014.
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, the value of
nickel
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had experienced a significant decline over the 12 months of 2014,
while
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the
price
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of
other
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the other
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two
metals
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, which are bronze and zinc fluctuated slightly during the same period. All three
metals
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experienced
price
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decline in the
firs
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first
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- half­ year,
,
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among which
nickel
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's
price
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ranked first(6%) in January, falling to ­3% remarkably in June, which bottomed at its lowest.
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the meantime, both bronze and
nickel
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had
rem ained
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remained
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decreasing but with a slower decreasing speed compared with copper,
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nickel
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declined gradually, reaching approximately ­0.5% in June.
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,
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prices
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price
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for all
metals
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remained stable from July to September . After a slight decrease in October, they all resumed their upward trend in November. the raw material of brass ( zinc and copper) continued to rise until December.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, metals, nickel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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